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2002-11-29, 09:33 AM
2002-11-29, 09:52 AM
my feelings can best be summed up as such, :cool2:.
2002-11-29, 10:43 AM
/me make mental note never to cut in line in front of Hamma! :D
Excellent read as always Manitou!!
2002-11-29, 11:12 AM
2002-11-29, 01:05 PM
darn this is some very nice story. S!
:clap: :clap: :clap:
2002-11-29, 09:12 PM
It didn't connect to the rest of the storyline in the least, and created a perfect character that never makes mistakes. This perfection is to the point of it being extreamly unrealistic.
Hamma just seems too L337
It lacked a transision to the present time from the flashback it entered.
I'm still waiting for something to be writen from the NC perspective.
Note:This is just my opinion, and my atempt at constructive critisism. Any Flames will be ignored.
2002-11-29, 09:43 PM
There are going to be a ton of installments until game release. Give it time ;)
2002-11-29, 10:04 PM
Hamma, Kaikou, TheShift, Enigma and the three other pilot trainees were all very nervous, but still confident they would do well.
hahaha i love that part :)
“This is Mosquito 12 to tower, over,” Hamma said on the com-link.
and all that stuff too, nice touch
2002-11-30, 01:39 AM
This is a great piece of writing and I hope to see much, much more. I don't want to offend you, but I consider myself to be a very good writer. Planetside looks like it would be extremely fun to write about, and I want to be a part of it. If it would be possible to write some sort of companion to the pilot stories I'd be extremely happy. Maybe a story about the MAX support teams, or Guerilla Snipers of the Terran Republic, or even the story of a frontline grunt. I think just about anything from this game would be an exciting story. Just please think about it before you turn me down, please.
2002-11-30, 10:56 AM
Excellent work, as always. :D
But if you wanted creative criticism, then what SandTrout said. ;)
2002-11-30, 01:00 PM
I really do listen to the criticism guys! It gives me a perspective I don't have; the ability to see it objectively!
Trust me, I listen to every piece of info and you will see me apply the ideas as I go! This is a work in progress, and I an having a blast doing it!!
Thanks all, for the nice comments and help!! :love:
2002-12-01, 07:34 PM
i would write a planet side story, but it would not be half as cool as yours, it would just be the Vanu killing TR and TR.....no plot.
2002-12-02, 01:18 PM
Nice work Manitou. I have finally caught up on them all. Keep up the good work :)
2003-03-18, 06:01 PM
Great job, looking forward to some more stories from ya!
2003-03-18, 07:17 PM
ok, from now on, lets not bump three month old threads, ok IggyWattson?
2003-03-19, 12:50 AM
Well, I just read the story recently so I told him my opinion. Doesn't bother me how old it was, what does it matter to you?(retorical question, not in need of a reply)
2003-03-19, 12:58 AM
There is always PMs. :)
2003-03-19, 07:11 AM
eh, bumping a thread like this is not a problem, as it is linked from the article. Go easy on the guy :p
2003-03-19, 08:04 AM
Hamma, stop bumping threads
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