Hey ArcherLangley,
Great stuff! I like the light, slightly humorous tone mixed in with the battles, a nice alternative to the standard grim war stories that normally populates the fan fiction forums
. I like how you're building up characters for the long haul too - feels like it could become an epic tale!
PSU is normally pretty quiet in terms of feedback for stories - maybe you should try posting it at the
Planetside Lore reddit or try your luck at the
main Planetside reddit too.
P.S. If you have any lore-related writing you should consider entering it in the Auraxis Literary Awards - still six days to enter (before end April). Link in my signature
.
Keep up the good writing,
Sonny