[Effective]

Make the video shorter (3-5 minutes would be ideal), edit out the unnecessary parts such as, sitting in WG/random driving. Anything lacking action (excluding opening/credits/similar).

Remove ingame sounds and TS chatter. Music wasn't awful. Though, I would have used in a shortened ANT crash scene for example).
Could be worse could be better.

Other then dogfights against actual enemies generally looks better (not that inhouse stuff with friends isn't fun, because it is), and the ANT crash would have looked better if you had a phantasm doing the recording.